Before:
Stretching sentence
Who: The boy ran.
What: The boy ran fast.
When As the rain pours down the boy ran fast.
Where: As the rain pours down the boy ran fast through the terrifying forest.
Why: As the rain pours down the boy ran fast through the terrifying forest, trying to get away from the strange creature that was following him.
After:
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Who: The boy ran.
What: The boy sprinted.
When As the rain poured down the boy sprinted.
Where: As the rain poured down the boy sprinted through the terrifying forest.
Why: As the rain poured down the boy sprinted through the terrifying forest, trying to get away from the bizarre creature that was following him.
L.I Use draft to check our sentences.
Great work Zahn. You have transformed your sentences into powerful sentences! Using the 5Ws and DRAFT helps to make your writing much more interesting. Your sentences paint a clear picture in my mind.
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